Shock wrote:An implausible escape, but not by comic book standards. Good action!
It was kind of awkward to write. It's been outlined for weeks but the hard part was writing it so that the only characters that get knocked around, or embarrassed, at all were mine. Otakumon is Kaisius's character and it was already weird enough writing dialogue for him. He did make the biggest hit in the fight and that hit from the Samurai Linebacker is going to stick with Susan throughout the rest of the story. I think for a quick scuffle where Susan is completely outgunned everyone came out with their dignity intact.
The escape was originally more detailed. Lets just say that Susan is out five thousand dollars and is currently sneaking across a few roof tops to make it to the end of the block. It just slowed down the pacing a little too much for what I wanted and I honestly preferred the quick comedy beat of Sea-King and Otakumon there at the end. *Shrug*